Hear ye' hear ye' New edit challenge!!

[JoeMc]

I choose a POTW for my edit challenge!
I want to see the variables on what I could have done better.
This is the saved file straight out of the camera.

My edit is here:

http://www.bytephoto.com/photopost/s...hp?photo=83200

The link to your edit opp is here:

http://www.bytephoto.com/photopost/s...hp?photo=89902

Thanks in advance for playing along.
Cheers, Joe